Thursday, February 23, 2012

a day in haze


Darkness consuming
upon my awakening

the blood is cold
and muscles stiffening

a tai chi morning
marking a silent road

with body loosened deep
and a morning ferry walk

I listen to Shakespeare talk
in drifting sleep

but leave this dream
for a cafe stop

and mocha bought, the leaf on top
concealed by whipping cream

the words come slow
and flow into espresso double-shot

that lifts the fog before a client jot
with necktie worn for show


22 comments:

  1. much to like in this...the silent road...the reading shakespeare on the way to work...the words, flowing into espresso double-shot....and the book of course... smiles
    this is a wonderful prompt and i like how your images pull me into your day..

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  2. Your images appear as though being seen as fog (or a cloud) disappears and turns to mist each more vivid as the sun shines through your busy day. Lovely.

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  3. A sleepy, light, ethereal feel to this. I also love the way you wind up to meet the start of the work day from the quiet lull of getting there.
    Lovely.
    Thanks for such a great prompt at the dVersePoets pub tonight.

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  4. I really enjoyed this coming to life, from Tai Chi to Shakespeare to book! Getting the muscles going! K.

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  5. but the words that come out slow
    they flow into espresso double-shot

    that lifts the fog

    is def my fav part...great write and thanks for a great write as well at dverse...looking forward to seeing what everyone brings....thanks for taking us on this trip with you...

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  6. I love the sense that you are slowly becoming alert while moving through routines. Sounds a lot like my mornings. Fabulous work.

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  7. This really captures waking up and getting going. I enjoyed it!

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  8. Shakespeare is good anytime in my world.

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  9. Thanks for a glimpse into your day..coffee, Shakespeare, and all

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  10. Gosh some days it takes a coffee or two to really get going... Sounds like a good start though!

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  11. The last verse was a complete change of tone, but I'll look out for the book now!

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  12. but the words that come out slow
    they flow into espresso double-shot

    This is superb.

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  13. Tai chi, Shakespeare, lattes ,ferry walks and neck ties...you present a nice life in little cameos...lovely!

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  14. I really like this:

    and mocha bought, the frothy leaf on top
    concealed by whipping cream

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  15. now that's an everyday waking well put ;-) thanks!

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  16. very nice connection of thoughts/impressions. The morning aspect and the things one does to awake, whether it be a stroll or the need for something stronger is clearly shown. The drifting of shakespeare I loved. And I needed that double shot this morning for sure. Also, the idea of the leaf covered in whip cream-really like how that image is displayed and the metaphor within that line alone. Great job. Thanks

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  17. Oh, I am so not a morning person. This is definitely how I behave in the A.M. before coffee kicks in. Very nicely done.

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  18. I am a morning person so the visual of waking up for Tai chi speaks to me....the strong visual for me are these lines:

    mocha bought, the leaf on top
    concealed by whipping cream

    Great to meet you at D'verse ~

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  19. Love the flow of this, the images. This was a great prompt, greatly enjoyed. Thank you.

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  20. the rhythm and flow is exceptional. Build into the equation the descriptions...makes for a thing of beauty!...reminds me that although abstract- non rhyming poetry is great- that short form, rhyming poetry (albeit not firmly structured- which just adds character in my opinion)is a real skill, which when built with precision- can end up being so so powerful and lovely to read.

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  21. you have really given us a story in a nutshell and that done with few words and great rhythm. Thankyou!

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