Time begins in flesh
left soul-less after death
yet living through the
essence
of those who believe.
In a
lunatic’s soul
The vampire gives birth
to circulating qi
that winds through sucking
tunnels
connecting the limbs and
mind.
we
feel the toll
You have killed one man,
so what’s another
in a night that’s black
with waters of abyss?
the
hangman’s noose
You can’t murder a man
who’s been dead for
centuries,
for there is wisdom in the
dead,
and a blind burning in love.
we
struggle loose
And in our veins there is life,
the blood of Abraham
that carried a people starved
and stabbed by men of war.
But there are things that are
worse than death
when the heart is drunk
and secrets leak from the
grave
and what we see is the illusion
of flesh.
Note: Qi or chi (both the same, just romanized differently), in Chinese medicine, is something like
energy of life, a vital force that circulates through the body along pathways, analogous to the body's bio-electricity and heat. Practices
like Chi Gong (qigong) attempt to improve the flow of qi for health benefits.
Allusions: Garrett Fort, Sylvia Plath, Guy Endore, various old Dracula movies.
Allusions: Garrett Fort, Sylvia Plath, Guy Endore, various old Dracula movies.
This is written for
today’s dVersePoet’s prompt, “vampires,”
which I am guest-hosting.
Please see my translation of Charles Baudelaire's "Vampire" for his take on the subject.
Please see my translation of Charles Baudelaire's "Vampire" for his take on the subject.
You trace a legend here -- following its Qi. k.
ReplyDeleteVampires suck..lol I would hate to be condemned to live forever. I would think after 3 or 4 hundred years it would get a bit boring.
ReplyDeleteYes, I agree, this is legendary. Great prompt
You can’t murder a man
ReplyDeletewho’s been dead for centuries,
for there is wisdom in the dead,
and blind burning in love.
great bit there...vampires or otherwise...like the use of Qi a word i did not know until recently....there are things far worse than death for sure...secrets leaking from graves and illusion of flesh great closing touches...
The blood of Abraham... wow... and the last four lines, to me, are especially powerful. Thank you for a great prompt.
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There is wisdom in the dead..food for thought.
ReplyDeleteI specially like the ending lines ~
http://a-sweetlust.blogspot.ca/2012/04/poetics-vampires.html
Being a vampire I can fantasize. I'd probably die finally of the disease Bloodism, for I would certainly be a blood-a-holic.
ReplyDeleteEnough about me! YOU...are who conjured this prompt, so that the "best-of-the-best" might show again their talents. And you and they succeeded!
A lunatic's soul, the killing toll, struggle loose from hangman's noose--because you CANNOT kill one who is already dead.
And yes, finally...worse than death? Well--for some--life, of course! Not what you meant, but....
S'Wonderful!
I like this, the feeling of describing two undead forces, the mythical and reality...nice write!
ReplyDeletenice...love the use of qi...had no idea about the meaning...love the mention of abraham's blood and there certainly are things worse than death...the drunk heart, the illusion of flesh...great closure... hey..and thanks for hosting...great having you over at dVerse with this wonderful prompt
ReplyDeleteThat is looking over the edge of the precipice...
ReplyDeletescary. Even scarier to think that death might not be the end. Hamlet's fear.
Very neat read. Great prompt, thanks for hosting Poetics tonight. Really nice job here. Thanks
ReplyDeleteIn a lunatic's soul
ReplyDeleteWe feel the toll
The hangman's noose
We struggle loose
I loved the way these lines strung every thought, every line together.
(I play the flute, though it isn't blue)
Very nice take blue flute on this clever topic ... maybe living forever is not all it's cracked up to be ... a lunatic's soul ... hmm, no bargain there - good write.
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Hard to re-mine this archetype for anything fresh with the deluge of vampire chic out there, but you do a very good job at writing to the dark heart of it, opening new perspective.
ReplyDelete"...But there are things that are worse than death
when the heart is drunk..."
Shivers on that one. Thanks for an excellent prompt.
I'm trained in Reiki so that link to Qi called me to attention. There are now many thoughts swirling in my head so I'm going to ruminate and get back to you. Excellent writing.
ReplyDeleteWhat I like most about your poem, is t really had some that made me stand back and rethink a few things, our generations n or blond lines, who we are where we come from and how we sometimes fool ourselves and others. Thank you
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oh my! this is a frightening write with images I will take to my dreams (or nightmares) tonight. great idea for the prompt, btw.
ReplyDeleteThe most interesting twist for me in this interpretation is the introduction of themes that are rare in vampire mythology - the concept of Qi, and the Blood of Abraham. Just juxtaposing those concepts against the standard legend is extremely powerful.
ReplyDeleteQigong can cure lots of ailments just through breathing exercises apparently. Your adoption of 'chi' to your verse gives that divine feel. Great write, Blue Flute!
ReplyDeleteHank
But there are things that are worse than death
ReplyDeletewhen the heart is drunk
and secrets leak from the grave
and what we see is the illusion of flesh.
What a finale! What a verse! And what a prompt! Many thanks.
Yes, it is that finale that leaves me breathless! Perfection.
ReplyDeleteThis prompt was a great one and I thank you for it.
This is far reaching and layered. The different cultural inclines give a different look at this theme, and I for one, am thankful.
ReplyDeleteThere is an honesty and a universality in this poem.
But there are things that are worse than death
when the heart is drunk
and secrets leak from the grave
and what we see is the illusion of flesh.
Killer end sentences.
Lady Nyo
Very well done.
ReplyDeleteI also must bow in admiration to the closing lines of this poem...simply stunning!
ReplyDeleteLove this, especially:
ReplyDelete"But there are things that are worse than death
when the heart is drunk"
Excellent.
I really found this very profound, deep for its spareness of expression, letting the words sink in as we move from stanza to stanza. The interweaving of the two poems is very effective, adding that dimension of emotional response that seems to echo two parts of a soul torn in two, perhaps by mortality. I enjoyed this very much, as always so well crafted.
ReplyDeleteWhat beauty in this poem...its depth takes time..there is not hurry when reading this one. The ending profound...my mother and father are now gone and we are hearing secrets leaked from the grave.
ReplyDeleteFab - great prompt, thank you - love the lines 'You can’t murder a man / who’s been dead for centuries' - clever and chilling - just the ticket
ReplyDeleteThis is very thought-provoking.Each pair of lines carries another bit of truth or commentary on life. All tied together, they create a chilling poem. I like this much!
ReplyDeleteThere are so many wonderful lines in this. I love how you wove truth, chinese tradition, and a little occult in one poem. Loved it. Thanks for the thought provoking prompt.
ReplyDelete"there is wisdom in the dead/and blind burning in love"
ReplyDeleteI didn't realize you had hosted this prompt. I was over at your translations, which are truly marvelous, and now I see your poetry "in your own write." Expressive, the blood of Abraham, reminding us of a commonality of spirit. Impressive write, thank you! Amy
Hi, sorry for the delayed response - just having to get food on the table! Nice to see a fresh take on the myth
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